illumination
we were walking down the solitary lane
from light to a dark end
we two men saw twin selves
but not in flesh
the shadows
they emerged from their mortal frames
although thinner
but didn’t hesitate to grow longer and even surpassed
as we went ahead
our shadows cherished every bit of the lightlessness
until a sudden gush of glow bathed us
we two men saw twin selves
but not in flesh
although thinner
but didn’t hesitate to grow longer and even surpassed
as we went ahead
our shadows cherished every bit of the lightlessness
Shadow Men -- Catarina Costa Fernandes
The fleshless twin selves in the poem Illumination, the alter egos of the poet's peronas, walking down the solitary lane to the dark end of death, looking like mere shadows, growing longer in size and realising the sudden gush of divine light, the after life on them.The expression of the wishful thinking of man about his final journey reminds me of the metaphysical poems in English, for the conceits used and the colour and the bright of the death wish.Interesting read, indeed.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sir!
DeleteLine breaks after 'longer' and 'cherish' would make it sound better. And I also feel that 'although' is an excess; 'thinner' alone is okay. -- Tuhin Sanyal
ReplyDeleteThank you, Tuhin! That's like my brother-poet! I'll certainly keep your lines in my mind as I include the poem in one of my forthcoming collections.
DeleteBTW, forget about syntax, what is your opinion on the poem?